Do you like my Poem? Feedback please?
September 21st, 2009 Posted by: admin
Untitled.
If this is how it ends..
Take my heart to the grave and lock it with your lips.
Grasp it tight, don’t let it break then seal it with a kiss.
It won’t be long before we laugh and reminece.
Time heals failure, love, and risks.
Wet my lips one last time, hold me tight before I die.
Cause life without you dreads a fear.
I’ll miss the blue in your eyes, don’t shed a tear.
Persuasion without you lingers alone.
My heart pumps cold, yet it’s hard as stone.
I miss you already, but I know you’re home.
Yet, your heart beats still in my mind alone.
By: Dominica Manno
By: Lil D
Tags: Feedback, Persuasion, Poem
September 26th, 2009 at 14:49
OMG THANK WAS SOOOOOO GOOD ONE OF THE BEST POEMS I HAVE EVER READ!!!! If You have any more poems that I could read, I would greatly appreciate it if u could email me some.
September 27th, 2009 at 18:03
I like this =]
even though it’s short, there’s so much imagery that i feel as if i can feel what you feel. Great poem.
September 28th, 2009 at 13:57
I love it.
I could feel the emotion just pouring out of it.(:
(thanks for answering mine.)